Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Television has been human’s best friend and best entertainer for a century. However, I firmly believe that TV has eliminated interaction among our loved ones. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, modern children spend most of their time in front of the TV, not with their family, so it robs their precious childhood memories from them. To be more specific, in the past, we had plenty of time to talk with our kids and play with them; however, today we usually prefer watching television over concerning for them. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I was a little girl, I could not stand waiting for my father to play with him. He has spent most of his life for my well-being and happiness. Hence, today whenever I feel devastated, I really like thinking about my childhood memories such as how I learned to ride a bike and how to cook for the first time. However, since my younger sister was born, he has not spent as much time as he gave me because of widespread television. As long as time passes, she becomes more timid and shy person than ever before. Therefore, television exactly has negatively affected on human’s connection with each other.
On top of this, it also causes addiction to watching it, especially for teenagers. Since in this period of life, people are usually changed completely in both physical and mental ways. At that time, their best advisors and listeners have become their friends. Nevertheless, modern youth usually spend their spare time on television, not their best friends. Drawing from my own experience, when I was in adolescence, I was really loved watching Korean Dramas. I did not often pay attention to my friends. After six months of active TV-lover, I deeply realised that I did not have any friends who still want to touch on me. I feel hopeless and did not know what to do next. As a result, I even thought about suicide, but I decided to give up on TV because it led me to feel alone. It goes without saying that TV has indirectly influenced our communication with others, but I feel that I am lucky enough to understand it.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that television has adversely affected our interaction with the real world. This is because it robs our invaluable childhood memories from us and this is because it leads us to become a lonely person.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66974595843 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66992575531 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533487297921 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0818639472 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0416666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45833333333 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0915943427114 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265100447916 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314327359673 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615510526975 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163885228568 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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