Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A glance at people attitude toward celebrities brings to the light a question that has provoked a debate several times, namely, whether famous entertainers are important for younger adults or older people. Although some may think that old people like to follow celebrities, especially in social media such as Twitter and Instagram, I believe that even if they follow them, it is not as important as it is for teenagers.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that individuals tends to find a good example of successful person and imitate his behaviors. They really enjoy to be popular one day and most people know them everywhere, whereas this is not a dream for old adults. For example, when I was at university, as a sophomore student, I would like to be an actress and my model was Leila Hatami, a well-known actress in Iran. After two or three years, I understood that it is not the life that I want and being famous has a lot of inconveniences. Then, I started to build my real life and became successful in my career. Therefore, being reputable is the first factor that is attractive for young people.
Another subtle that I should deem is the fact that students have more time to watch movies and sports games, so they are more interested to understand the biography of athletes. For instance, I do not have time to watch even one season of game of thrones, the most popular movie these years, since I have to work inside and outside the house and spend my spare time with my family. Hence, I do not know any actor to follow him. As a matter of fact, when a person has more time to entertain himself, celebrities would influence him more.
Admittedly, there are some older people who are really enthusiastic of art and try to mimic the newest fashion and be up to date. For these individuals, the effect of well-known artists is much more than the youth. Even though they try to seem beautiful, the ratio of them is still lower. In other words, we can ignore their population because they are not majority of people.
Due to aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I strongly assert that definitely celebrities can affect teenagers more than anybody else.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy being'.
Suggestion: enjoy being
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70512820513 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67801947289 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1814010404 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.941176471 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88235294118 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222048459804 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611328118562 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435401306215 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111131626353 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615146595413 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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