In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?

Our diaspora is broadly segregated into two halves oriental and occidental. So there are bound to be differences on social, economical and cultural front as well. Therefore, the issue of older people increasing and having a positive or negative effects on the society is no exception and is irrefutable. Although, there are advantage and disadvantages associated with getting older. Ultimately, I opine that increasing number of old people has more negative effect on the society that positive. I will explain why with pertinent argument and examples. There are myriad of argument in favor of my stance. the most conspicuous one is that older people contribute little or nothing to the society. This can be detrimental to the economic.
Another, pivotal aspect of my argument is that older people are quick to sickness, which will course increase in medical bill by private health insurance. Furthermore, older people are not able to pay tax annually, as a result federal and state government increases tax bill, for tax payers.
Meanwhile, underpinning the aforementioned an empirical aspect of my argument is that older people retires from work quickly creating room for young generation to better get employed. Besides, older ones can still give good quality counsel to younger ones to help better make good decision in life.
Although, the situation seems dire, but there are several steps we can take to make real tangible changes. Firstly, to support our ageing population to help them aged healthy, physically and emotionally. Secondly, federal and state government should combine task force to see that increase in tax does not affect younger ones, and as a result will refuse to work and prefer to be looked after by the government.
In conclusion, I would like to say that although, older population is highly beneficial but we must be prudent to strike a balance, logical and rational approach towards the same for the optimal and fruitful outcomes of efforts or utilization of resources.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.5418719212 161% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 8.36945812808 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 31.9359605911 125% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.75862068966 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1207.87684729 139% => OK
No of words: 324.0 242.827586207 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.92707691288 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82386999195 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 139.433497537 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.580463131201 102% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 379.143842365 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1605459412 50.4703680194 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8235294118 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0588235294 20.9669160288 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 7.25397266985 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193121027424 0.242375264174 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599227023481 0.0925447433944 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862922637509 0.071462118173 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878988762058 0.151781067708 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886076613583 0.0609392437508 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 12.6369458128 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.1260098522 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 11.5310837438 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.32886699507 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 55.0591133005 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.94827586207 60% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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