TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

To be supported financially is so important while you are an adult because when the person is adult his responsibility is

an increase.Although some people think that youths should enjoy their lives when they are juvenile, personally, I agree with

the above statement the children should learn to manage their own money at a young age in order to become responsible

adults. This will be the focus of my essay.

Frist and foremost, when young has a plan for his money, people will consider him as an active person in the society and deal

with him in a more respectful way. For example, my uncle planned to collect every penny in his life and when he got the

age of marriage, he had his own house and got married without asking his family to spend any money on him. Thus, take

your responsibility in this life makes a person to get a respect from others.

second, money helps to make a family happier. For instance, I worked hard in my life and could save my money for my

future. Therefore, when I got married, I could make my wife the happiest person in this world. We could spend our

honeymoon in Turkey; I could buy her whatever she likes. So, money is one of the keys that makes a family happier.

Third, without money dreams will be so hard or even impossible. For example, when I was in a high school, I had a dream

to be virologist in the future. Is that possible to be specialist in one of the life fields without having some currency to pay

your tuition? Of course, when I saved my penny I could get a master's degree in virology. That did not even happen without

that money I had. So, your dream can be here without being a responsible person.

In conclusion, when a young financially takes his responsibility in the life, he can be more respectful in the society, make

his family lives happier, and achieve his dreams.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6130952381 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59118704139 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488095238095 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.0361975975 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1764705882 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.53405017921 375% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176081323956 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501251357254 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888109919451 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0708293356162 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108123607523 0.0645574589148 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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