If the society we currently live is known by the way it is, that is just because we were influenced by our ancestors. In other words, every single thing we have access today is a result of someone’s influence from past generations. If women’s rights exist, if rulers who abuse their power are dismissed or even if education is starting to be prioritize in some countries, is because young people fought for it. And this essay will explain why I truly believe that young people can not only make important decisions, but also are our only hope of a better and equal society in the future.
First, is historically known that women’s right was always different from men’s rights. However, if women can vote and work it is just because past women were not satisfied with the reality they were forced to face, and decided to go against it, in order to conquer equal rights to their next generations. I remember when I was in college and they announced that election for the new class representative. According to the board, only men were eligible to the place. As a result, all the women decided to sign a petition and send to university’s coordinator requiring equal rights in the department. The coordinator sincerely apologized and changed the requirements, and such decision affected not only our class, but also all of our future freshmen.
Second, since the earliest times, society has to deal with governments that concentrate their power and use it in favor of minority groups, disregarding those who are most effected, the majorities. My grandmother always told me the story about the march against government’s corruption she was part of when she was young, which ended with the impeachment of Brazil’s current president. By the time, I could not imagine how young people were able to change the political situation in a whole country, however, after the new corruption’s scandals announced in Brazil, I saw myself in 2017’s march fighting against corruption. This reflects how our current attitudes are result of the past young people’s wish of change.
As last, some countries face serious issues with their educational system. In Brazil, for example, the lack of basic conditions, strikes due to the non-payment of teacher’s salary, as well as overcrowded classes turned into a reality that affects student’s and teacher’s daily life. In light of this, in 2016, students from several states from Brazil decided to occupy their schools in order to try to stop with a political measure that would affect even more the Brazilian education system. As a result, the government did not implement the measure, however, many changes must still be made in order to the Brazilian educational system be considered minimally satisfactory.
To sum up, If we are who and where we are today, it is thanks to young people’s influence, that was, is and will always be extremely important to society, because young people claim for better rights, they are innovative and, after all, they are the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, still, well, after all, as to, for example, as a result, as well as, by the way, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2553.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.106 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01139901043 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.51792114695 370% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6812274762 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.833333333 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7777777778 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159134423728 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483344437844 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527010619667 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975752538011 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769974802908 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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