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Movies are popular all around the world? Why movies are so popular?
Once newspapers and books were most popular and people got used to buying and reading at least some of them each week. But, in the modern time, with improving in moviemaking industry, the public prefer to watch movies rather than reading books or doing other amusing work so that movies could become the most popular. In fact, today the public make they amused and aware of the surrounding world by watching movies at the cinema or on the TV and on the computer. From my idea, although there are various reasons for being more common of the movies, the most principal ones are that movies are conveni...
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Sentence: But, in the modern time, with improving in moviemaking industry, the public prefer to watch movies rather than reading books or doing other amusing work so that movies could become the most popular.
Description: The fragment public prefer to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace prefer with verb, past tense
Sentence: In fact, today the public make they amused and aware of the surrounding world by watching movies at the cinema or on the TV and on the computer.
Description: The fragment public make they is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense
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Score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 604 350
No. of Characters: 2696 1500
No. of Different Words: 261 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.957 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.464 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.274 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.37 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.467 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.63 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5