If I could go back to some time and place in the past, I would choose the time I spend whole year as an exchange student in Finland.
Four years ago I decided to study abroad and until I left for Finland three years ago, I studied english so hard every day. At that time I was a college student and motivated to try new thing and get experience. I studied about media design in university especially web development. By studying about this field, I got interest to read an article in english so english was not a language also its the fact to help me to understand wide subjects and opinions from international people. Day by day I felt that my knowledge was built and expand my expectations and opinions. Also, I was satisfied with the time to spend for improving my english skill.
While I was in Finland, I was always straggling with communication with someone and develop my own opinion because of the culture differences between Japan and Western countries. In Japanese college, usually we listen to the lecture and do self study to learn something. However, in Finland, Almost all classes I required to have discussion in a group and develop my presentation skill. I was afraid of giving a speech in front of people because I thought if I make any mistakes, they would refer me as an idiot or non educated person. However, I met one girl from South Korea. She was a brave because there is no hesitate and ashamed from her. Her english was not perfect that was not a matter for her. She had confidences in the contents of her speech. After that, I asked her what brought her to that attitude and she told me that challenge and persistence were all we need. Showing my confidence to what I do is the important more than being good at speaking or something.
I would think that it is an important what we talk, what we think, how to solve problems we have more than how we act or language skills. My perspective and insight are totally different now and before because of the experience in Finland.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ee years ago, I studied english so hard everyday. At that time I was a college student a...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...lish so english was not a language also its the fact to help me to understand wide ...
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Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nd expand my expectations and opinions. Also I was satisfied with the time to spend ...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e and do self study to learn something. However in Finland, Almost all classes I requir...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing a speech in front of people because i thought if i make any mistakes, they wo...
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Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...in front of people because i thought if i make any mistakes, they would refer me ...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ke any mistakes, they would refer me as a idiot or non educated person. However I...
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Line 5, column 535, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...r me as a idiot or non educated person. However I met one girl from South Korea. She ha...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... met one girl from South Korea. She has was a brave because there is no hesitate an...
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Line 5, column 910, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... we need. Showing my confidence to what i do is the important more than being goo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51373626374 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63892324477 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552197802198 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2336091837 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4736842105 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.47368421053 5.45110844103 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0834373101808 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0287107545759 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931277143594 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116696390377 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175076348744 0.0645574589148 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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