"Jazz music is extremely popular in the city of Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Also, a number of well-known jazz musicians own homes in Monroe. Nevertheless, the nearest jazz club is over an hour away. Given the popularity of jazz in Monroe and a recent nationwide study indicating that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment, a jazz music club in Monroe would be tremendously profitable."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The writer states that a jazz music club in Monroe will achieve an enormous profit. To buttress the argument, several reasons are provided: the popularity of jazz music, the expenditure on jazz entertainment people make, and the nearest jazz club away from one-hour distance. The argument, however, is untenable if many unwarranted assumptions on which it lies cannot be confirmed.
The first assumption that jazz music is popular in Monroe is based on three evidences: one is over 100,000 people participated in jazz festival last summer, the other is "Jazz Nightly" gets the highest rating, coupled with properties there by a number of well-known jazz musicians. If the majority participators came to Monroe only once, and will never return, if Jazz Nightly rating depends hinges greatly on freely-donating advertisements, if these jazz musicians purchase houses just for investment, maybe all of these people will not spend any money on a jazz music club in Monroe. So, it is uncertain for a new jazz club about whether it will have a large number of consumers or not.
Additionally, the writer introduces a recent nationwide study that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment, assuming that there is a huge potential for a new jazz club in Monroe. But the study may be biased, rough, or may be suitable simply to the nation, not to Monroe. And, jazz fans may spend $1,000 per year on instruments, records, instead of clubs. In this respect, the market potential of a new jazz music club in Monroe seems slight.
The third assumption is that a new jazz music club in Monroe may also have no competitors, relying on the evidence that the nearest jazz club is over an hour away. Nevertheless, capital often floods into profitable markets. If jazz clubs in Monroe have a bright future, it must draw large numbers of investors to influx, instigating cruel competition. In this way, the first jazz club will gradually lose its market share. So, no information makes sure that a new jazz music club in Monroe will monopolize market.
Valid though all above-mentioned assumptions are, it thereby asserts a jazz club will have a tremendous profit. It may be too preposterous to be credible. As a new music club, it may get so hard without experiences in management and operation, which play a crucial role in the sustainability of a club. Moreover, with no feasibility analysis, it is vague about whether a jazz club is profitable or not, how much the profit will be, not to mention tremendous profits.
To sum up, a credible investigation about the potential market of a jazz music club in Monroe and a systematic feasibility analysis will make lenders willing to put out money on such a project. Otherwise, simply by these unjustifiable assumptions is it difficult to persuade loaners to lending money on a jazz music club in Monroe.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2314 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.781 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.823 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.082 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 664, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ew jazz club about whether it will have a large number of consumers or not. Additionally, the ...
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Line 6, column 104, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hat the typical jazz fan spends close to ,000 per year on jazz entertainment, assu...
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Line 6, column 329, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... not to Monroe. And, jazz fans may spend ,000 per year on instruments, records, in...
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Line 10, column 333, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of a club. Moreover, with no feasibility analysis, it is vague about whether a ja...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, third, well, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2409.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97727272727 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95005655066 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49173553719 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9593195667 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.714285714 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0476190476 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376083854834 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127027625436 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117583599052 0.0701772020484 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220809843647 0.128457276422 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12070602229 0.0628817314937 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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