Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your positio
Education plays a vital role in developing ones persona. With right and profound education a person can become a good citizen in the future. It is the responsibility of the nation to rear and to educate students in the formal way without making them feel onus.
Here we can see two types of education systems. The developed countries with the formal education systems which lay no much starin on the student's mind and the formal education system of the developing countries. The developing countries like Iran follow the education system where in which the students are pressured to learn the boring rigid strategies. This will eventually restrain the student's minds to solve difficult problems based on some certain solutions which may lead to the depletion in creativity. They have to tolerate the pressure and submit the home works and assignments before date. This makes them not to have sufficient free time so that they can try out something new and creative on their own.
On the other hand, in the developed countries like Norway, the students are allowed to attend the training in a very leisure way. They are allowed to think in a creative way which gradually makes them to aggrandize their cognitive skills. Students may let out free rather than making them to attend the class. By doing this the students may try to solve the difficult problem rather than copying the solution given by the teacher. It also helps them to develop interest in the subjects.
Further, the way of education the developed countries are following helps the students to make free time for themselves so that they can try out something new in that time which in turn helps them to build the skills and acumen and ultimately helps to develop good career. This form of education is have the flexible strategy whereas the former paragraph explained the the style of educations the developing countries have a very rigid and boring strategy.
Thus in total, for a student to build good career in the field of education, they must not be in a pressure condition, restraining them to complete the course. Rather it should be the way in which the students try to understand and able to analyze the things on their own which will make them good future citizens.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...cation plays a vital role in developing ones persona. With right and profound educat...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... the formal education systems which lay no much starin on the students mind and th...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds solving'.
Suggestion: minds solving
...s will eventually restrain the students minds to solve difficult problems based on some certai...
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Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a creative way" with adverb for "creative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... leisure way. They are allowed to think in a creative way which gradually makes them to aggrandiz...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... good career. This form of education is have the flexible strategy whereas the forme...
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Line 7, column 366, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... whereas the former paragraph explained the the style of educations the developing coun...
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Line 7, column 366, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... whereas the former paragraph explained the the style of educations the developing coun...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e a very rigid and boring strategy. Thus in total, for a student to build good c...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...estraining them to complete the course. Rather it should be the way in which the stude...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, whereas, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 384.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8671875 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54199616845 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455729166667 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7192346636 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209726072902 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744890610775 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429226371151 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13156210882 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194810649393 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.