On first glance the memo to the board of director of the company appears to be relevant. It states that as the climate forecasts are predicting comparatively cold weathers for the next few years, the demand of their heating oil would increase. In addition to that the memo also states that the number of residential building in the north eastern part of united states are increasing which opines the increase demands of the heating oil. But on closer analysis it appears that some questions are required to be asked to prove that whether the facts which are provided in the memo would really lead to increase in the demands of the heating oil of the company.
First thing that is important to ask is whether the new residential houses which are being constructed in the north eastern part of united states would be using oil heaters or some other modern heaters. Since it is clearly stated that the oil heating is a traditional heating method. The new houses which are being constructed may use electric heating methods or solar heating methods as they are more modern than the oil heating method which is 'traditional'. So this fact weakens the conclusion that is predicted in the memo that the demand would be increasing in the next five years.
In addition to that it can also be questioned that what was the drop in temperature below the normal temperature? as the author of the memo is asserting. Because if the drop in temperature below the normal temperature is infinitesimally negligible then the people would not require to heat their houses and so the demand of the heating oil would be less. This weakens the author's conclusion that the demands would increase. On the other hand if the temperature of the place drops by a high value below the normal temperature the demand of the oil would increase. This strengthens the author's conclusions.
Furthermore, the author states that the climate forecasts have predicted such trends of below normal temperature for several years. It is not clear that for how much that trend would be followed, on the other hand the author is predicting that demands would be increasing for the next 'five years'. This appears to be a statement without any evidence.While on the other hand with the passage of years more people would be using modern methods of heating rather than traditional method. This evidence also undermines the author's conclusion which is based on the weather forecasts.
To conclude, certain questions are asked about and answers follow them. If these information would be provided such as ambiguity in stating the number of years, stating the method traditional and properly stating the temperature. Then i think then the memo would have appeared more succinct.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK.
argument 2 -- not OK. correct way: maybe there are more days for above-normal temperatures.
argument 3 -- not OK. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2234 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.835 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.56 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.757 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ON_FIRST_GLANCE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at'?
Suggestion: At
On first glance the memo to the board of d...
^^
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l heaters or some other modern heaters. Since it is clearly stated that the oil heati...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...mperature below the normal temperature? as the author of the memo is asserting. Be...
^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mperature below the normal temperature? as the author of the memo is asserting. Be...
^^
Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'heating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: heating
...gible then the people would not require to heat their houses and so the demand of the h...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ing oil would be less. This weakens the authors conclusion that the demands would incre...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
... to be a statement without any evidence.While on the other hand with the passage of y...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to be a statement without any evidence.While on the other hand with the passage of y...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 519, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...thod. This evidence also undermines the authors conclusion which is based on the weathe...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...asked about and answers follow them. If these information would be provided such as ambiguity in ...
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Line 9, column 236, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... properly stating the temperature. Then i think then the memo would have appeared...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mo would have appeared more succinct.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, then, while, i think, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95878524946 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.651160366 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.373101952278 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2023283219 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.857142857 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9523809524 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179446133503 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685831685125 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555867938363 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116712558573 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614004551196 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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