TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We are living in a world of technology. It provides us with many tremendous things. However, it also generates a big problem that there are many games on computer and in fact children like playing computer games. The question is whether children should be allowed to playing computer games. Some people think that playing games is good to children. Some other would not agree with this point. In my opinion, playing games is just a waste of time. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, if children spend a lot of time playing computer games, they have less time to study. For children the pivotal job is to study. This is a prerequisite duty for children. We all know that children are always curious to know and to try something new. Thus, they find these things on playing computer games. As a result, they care about these games, they spend a lot of energy on these games. Consequences, when they are addicted to these games, they do not have time to study. For that, the loss of interest in their studies is undeniable. My nephew is a compelling example of this case. Last year, his father gave him a computer in order to support his studies. However, he used it to play many kinds of games. Last month his father tested his knowledge about mathematics, he could not answer as he did. Then his father recognized that his son played computer games all day. Eventually, his father punished him and told him not playing computer games anymore. Now my nephew can regain his grade.
Another reason is that spending too much time on playing game will make children become inactive and gaining weight. Playing some physical activities, such as jogging and exercises is very important for children to develop both physical and mental health. If children play computer games, they only sit in front of a computer and it is inevitable that their health will suffer a lot, and they will gain a lot of weight as well. For example my niece loves playing game named "rose adornment". After classes in school she always plays this game. Last week she recognized that she gained too much weight. He said that she will give up that game and do more exercise to reduce her weight. I hope she can do it.
Last but not least, if children devote their time on playing computer games, they have no time to communicate with their parents and their friends. Communication play a significant role in our lives. It not only helps us to convey our ideas and express our emotion, but it also a way to learn how to respect others and make more friends. Therefore, children who spend too much time playing games will lack of these skills. This will negatively affect them in their future. Otherwise the children who do not play games, they can spend their time to hang out with their friends and have social lives. This will provide them a good key to be successful in their future.
In conclusion, playing computer games causes of many serious problems in children. In my opinion, children should not be allowed to play them or parents have to regulate the time carefully in order to balance schedule for their children between playing games, studying and other jobs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... game named 'rose adornment'. After classes in school she always plays this...
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Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'plays'.
Suggestion: plays
...arents and their friends. Communication play a significant role in our lives. It not...
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Line 4, column 474, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...negatively affect them in their future. Otherwise the children who do not play games, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2649.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 566.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68021201413 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40161383329 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436395759717 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6003584229 194% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0584097859 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.225 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.15 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317514650082 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867269506772 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670824128033 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219385921564 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637491737858 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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