People attend college or university for different reasons . In your view, what is the reason of going to university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's era, it is necessary for each and every person to realise the value of education. Education widens a person's mental horizon of knowledge which is divided into three dias primary, secondary and tertiary.At present, universities mark top rank to make career of student bright.Here, i would like to explain the reasons why folk attend tertiary stage of education.
There are manifold points to endorse reasons. First and foremost, university education not only make us extrovert but also furnishes opportunity to stride in sports, singing, dancing, painting at national or international level.Moreover, university education installs various good job skills in candidates that proove handy for them in their career. Thus, quality of lifestyle upgrades automatically.
Furthermore, tertiary level is must to stride in the era of cut-throat competition. Hence, universities install spirit of emulation among people. Moreover, universities maximize the confidence, talent and potential of candidates, no doubt. These skills help them to persue a career with splended apptitudes.
In addition, the vital function to encourage people towards unversities is played by interest of making new friends as nowadays folk are keen intrested to make their friend list long. Consequently, they make friends and relish with them. Moreover, the interest and choice of participating in functions or cultural activities are also stimulating factors behind attending college/universities.Furthermore, to illustrate, survey conducted by time magazine had revealed that to stand upon own's feet universities education is must for every one. Thus, it make students worthy of living good life.
The crux is that, children are our future and universities / college are significant for them to achieve great success and respect from everyone in life.
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Sentence: Thus, it make students worthy of living good life.
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Sentence: In today's era, it is necessary for each and every person to realise the value of education.
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Sentence: Education widens a person's mental horizon of knowledge which is divided into three dias primary, secondary and tertiary.At present, universities mark top rank to make career of student bright.Here, i would like to explain the reasons why folk attend tertiary stage of education.
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Sentence: In addition, the vital function to encourage people towards unversities is played by interest of making new friends as nowadays folk are keen intrested to make their friend list long.
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Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.
Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
Para 4:Third, reason 3 blabla... do the same thing like First but shorter
Para 5: Conclusion.
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No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.083 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.446 4.6
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No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.222 7.5
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