By and large, student time is one the most crucial part of every person’s life when people are trying to crystalize their thoughts, shape their character and choose their future life and field. There is a moot point in this case as to who influence students the most, teachers or their friends. An outstanding argument indicated that students are more influenced by their teachers that their friends. I strongly repudiate this notion. In what follows, I will attempt to investigate some conspicuous reasons to justify my thesis.
First idea that deserves some words here is that students share same background and ongoing situations and common understanding. Needless to say that age difference between students and teachers trigger various understanding and point of view about almost everything. It goes without saying that a good understanding is the key factor of an affiant relationship and finally principal influence. To put it another way, students and their friends are struggling same issues and share same feeling and emotions which are much more diverse from teachers currents issues. An example will shed light on this notion. Consider a 16 year old boy who has trouble focusing on his study while his friend recommend him some pill to improve concentering which he himself had tried before an was surprised with the results while should he goes to his teacher for help, owing the fact that the teacher doesn’t have this problem, he probably will come up with limit of hobbies and strict study hours. Although his suggestion may be true, the students will apply his friend’s recommendation.
Second idea that comes to mind thinking about this subject is the formal type of relationship of students and teachers who make it impossible to communicate deeply. It goes without saying that the either majority of education system prefer formal relationship between student and teachers in order to improve order and obedience of students or the majority of teachers are prone not to involve with students’ personal issues, the aforementioned relationship stays at a level that dwindle the possibility of influence. To put it another way, in a deep intimate relationship people share personal thoughts and feeling and find the chance to effect each other which in ordinary student-teacher relationship doesn’t happen. For instance, consider a 14 years old girl who is interested in architecture. Owing the fact that her teacher keep the class so formal, she never finds the chance to discuss his interests with hem hence she discusses it with her friends.
To wrap it up, students are more influence by their friends than their teachers. Owing the fact that they face common situations and understanding and the preferred relationship of student and teachers are formal who destroys the chance of any possible affect.
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 78
- TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a
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Suggestion:
... deeply. It goes without saying that the either majority of education system pref...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, if, may, second, so, while, as to, for instance, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2403.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24672489083 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88710445472 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524017467249 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.8285721795 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.473684211 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1052631579 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222249341941 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817135096852 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895688608752 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166102346641 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069703345513 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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