TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

There are certain considerations or factors that everyone can take into account to investigate and examine necessary knowledge of the surrounded world. I certainly agree that it is important for us to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that will affect our daily life. someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follow.

First, the knowledge of the external world is an important factor to development ourselves and our countries. For example, it was announced that a Ministry of Education at Japan was going toward develop its educational system by introducing laptops instead of books at the classrooms for better and fast teaching process. In order to that, the Ministry of Education in my home country considered that events and followed the news and statistical values about its progress. The government decided to ask expert Japanese in the educational process to visit our country and helped the national Ministry of Education to put some strategies to held that educational program at our country.

Furthermore, I think that caring about the external events makes us very excited. For instance, World cup is the most prestigious association football competition in the world. Most of people even they are mans or women, old of young admired football and like to watching it. The last world cup ended from nearly a month, the streets and restaurants were full of large amounts of people from all the ages they were watching the matches and supported our national team and other teams which they admired.

Due to the aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that it is more profitable for our community to equip with the external events in according to keep in touch with the process of development and the most exciting events.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...likely that will affect our daily life. someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons...
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... cons of each side. The explanations go as follow. First, the knowledge of the externa...
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...urselves and our countries. For example, it was announced that a Ministry of Educ...
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... cup is the most prestigious association football competition in the world. Most ...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
...ion football competition in the world. Most of people even they are mans or women, old of you...
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...ey admired. Due to the aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, for example, for instance, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04290429043 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77244616804 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1594721754 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.538461538 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198917315465 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769092541349 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117949989975 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123631792171 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0978026990429 0.0645574589148 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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