Nowadays, with advancement of technology, the human’s life makes easier than before, and those of progresses are product some facilities to feel comfortable in our life. In my opinion, these things have some different positive and negative points, which I would like discuss about them.
First, that’s true the grower up of technology change the qualities of people life than whatever they were but, the problem is, in the past people are more calm and relax than now. They have never thinks about the economy or other countries politic, they just working a lot and they were thinking about how they can succeed on their agriculture and farming. But nowadays, in 2018, people faced on too much stress level and sometimes they could not control it. For example, my grand papa is 93 years old, and he always sleepy and he never thinks about the news, but my father is a businessman and most of the time, he’s checking the news of about gold rate, and very greedy when the prices go down. But my grandfather does not matter at all to him, he spoke many of his past before Alzheimer’s took, he said that, he was young, he woke up at 5 am and went to the garden, and at 5 pm his workers would go back to their house before the darkness because they had to go back along way and if some animals attacked them and they got injured they died, because of the lack of health. Or the pregnant women while they were working, they would be on labor in the middle of the garden and it depended on them some of them give birth and some of them died. He always told me; you and your family live in complete relaxing, but we were always afraid of everything that happened around us. But I don’t understand why in this era of progress and technology and grateful medical stuffs my mother died of cancer? I think the answer of my question is the subject of my next discussion.
Second, any technological advancement also has its own disadvantages, that never been before, including radio waves and radioactivity. Radioactivity is a part of our earth - it has existed all along. Naturally occurring radioactive materials are present in its crust, the floors and walls of our homes, schools, or offices and in the food we eat and drink. There are radioactive gases in the air we breathe. Our own bodies - muscles, bones, and tissue - contain naturally occurring radioactive elements. We also receive exposure from man-made radiation, such as X-rays, radiation used to diagnose diseases and for cancer therapy. And I’m as a doctor I know that, the effects of radiation at high doses and dose rates are harmful. A very large dose delivered to the whole body over a short time will result in the death of the exposed person within days. The uses of radiation and nuclear techniques in medicine, industry, agriculture, energy and other scientific and technological fields has brought tremendous benefits to society. The benefits in medicine for diagnosis and treatment in terms of human lives saved are enormous. Radiation is a key tool in the treatment of certain kinds of cancer.
In conclusion, even our life is much more comfortable than before, this is also having some disadvantages too, but I hope scientists invent something that is not harmful to any creatures. And I hope that the examples given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 42.0 13.8261648746 304% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2784.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 580.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68434778762 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 327.0 212.727598566 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563793103448 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 873.0 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 15.0 1.86738351254 803% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1022667059 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0837879019504 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0218286989451 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380922685702 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0591753630137 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354582674132 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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