TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by daryash72 on Fri, 07/20/2018 - 09:45

Due to progress of technology and science, in all community we can see some people area huge fan of something, like as football matches. Already have the biggest fan of football player like as Christian Rolando. And most of the people spend their time to watching Olympic games on televisions or online. So government’s follow some hobbies that most of the people enjoy it. Although art has its own place, we have even seen that, the athletics or normal people buy a famous portrait, but it couldn’t be being important like as Olympics. in my opinion, Olympic is by far the exciting sport program in the world.

First, I think that the Olympics speak to one of the particular motivations, that people create an identity, that national identity can translate into significant investments It can inspire you to watch the high-level skill and talent of the athletes competing in the Olympics. The stories of the athletes are inspirational and show their hard work and determination through obstacles. For example, I was watching the 2009 Olympics on television every single night. I even tried to convince my parents to buy the triple play package on cable so I could stay up all night and watch them live. although, if you were an athlete when you were younger, you are still an athlete now. It’s a part of you. The Olympics can push you to train harder or maybe even take up a new sport or endeavor. You can also train like an athlete in your exercise. for example, before 2009 Olympic, I was a fantastic horse rider but unfortunately, one race match before the Olympic my horse got injured and his waist had broken. And I omitted from all matches, and I lost my Olympic championship.

Second, most people in the world, even if they are not professionals in the sport, enjoy watching the profession, but when ordinary people whose art is not educated, they do not have much understanding of painting exhibitions. They may enjoy watching a movie and listening to music, but these thing doesn’t have an Olympic interesting.

In conclusion, in spite of all this, humans have different thoughts and tastes. One person interested of art and the other sports, and government should pay attention to both, but always the final vote depends on the majority of people. I hope that the examples given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89552238806 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82033828852 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562189054726 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3339358569 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7142857143 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11405505272 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036291538188 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267481780903 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626696141894 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237579935673 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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