Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the life, not everything we really wants, we can have it. Sometimes the things we like it are not suitable to us, while the things we not like it may be the key of our success, but a group of people believe if you not do what you like you will fail in it, and others said, in some situation you should do things that you do not enjoy doing and in my consideration I strongly agree with them.
First of all, as i said before, may the things that we not interested on it is the key that open the door of creativity and shining world, and it contribute in changing the path of our life to the best. Since doing same thing make our life so bored and kill the soul of challenge and our talent. While trying a new thing and live new adventure can help us in wake up the talent inside us, for example: my dream was entering the medicine department in the college and I can’t imagine I can success in other department, but due to personal problem I have to enter to engineering department although I hate it, but now due to my creativity in this major, I thank God because I continue on it.
Second, sometimes doing the thing that we hate it is the reason to achieve our goals. The most common example is the student who hates the studying, he just need to enjoy his live by playing games and hanging with his friends. So in this case, the thing that he love will not assist him in doing well in his exam and he make from the a loser person, while doing things that he hates it, which is studying will arrive him to the path of success.
Finally, in some cases leaving the things just because we don’t love it and not match with our dream, put our life as a whole in risk, for instance: my sister work in school as chemistry teacher and she find this job after many trying, but it’s not her job dream because she hate chemistry so much. So If she decided to leave her job, she will not able to pay the premiums of her apartment and car, for that reason she have to stay in his work because she hasn't another choice.
To sum up, not everything that we like it is the right thing to our life, may what we hate it is the way to open a lock door to the shine world and make our impossible possible.
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Sentence: First of all, as i said before, may the things that we not interested on it is the key that open the door of creativity and shining world, and it contribute in changing the path of our life to the best.
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Sentence: Since doing same thing make our life so bored and kill the soul of challenge and our talent.
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Sentence: While trying a new thing and live new adventure can help us in wake up the talent inside us, for example: my dream was entering the medicine department in the college and I can't imagine I can success in other department, but due to personal problem I have to enter to engineering department although I hate it, but now due to my creativity in this major, I thank God because I continue on it.
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Sentence: So in this case, the thing that he love will not assist him in doing well in his exam and he make from the a loser person, while doing things that he hates it, which is studying will arrive him to the path of success.
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Sentence: Finally, in some cases leaving the things just because we don't love it and not match with our dream, put our life as a whole in risk, for instance: my sister work in school as chemistry teacher and she find this job after many trying, but it's not her job dream because she hate chemistry so much.
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Description: The fragment she hate chemistry is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace hate with verb, past tense
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Score: 21 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 1716 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 3.963 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.096 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 84 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.86 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.684 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.27 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5