A debate between parents is going on for long about encouraging children to take part-time jobs. Some parents are in favor of part-time job opportunities, while others think kids will lose their focus from academics and their grades will get affected. But, I agree that introduction of professional world beforehand is highly beneficial to prepare for future adulthood challenges for few reasons.
First, children can choose a part-time job based on their interest. It will be an excellent opportunity to try various things before choosing a career. Interests or hobbies can turn into profession. When I was in the high school, one of my best friend Maya, took an internship in the local bakery. She learnt tips and tricks of the business. Soon her inclination turn into passion and and then to a profession. She went to culinary school and opened her own bakery. It's been proven that individuals become more successful, when their professions and interests align. Our society is need of highly motivated professionals.
As adults, we all are expected and faced with various responsibilities. A glimpse of professional world will help children to prepare to take on their future professional and personal responsibilities. Jobs will present kids with an crucial challenge to balance their work and academics together. Ability to multitask is a very useful tool for anyone. Kids will learn to manage finances; can save some money for college or pursue their interest without asking money from parents.
Lastly, along with the practical knowledge children will gain inter personnel skills, leadership, sportsmanship skills through job. Interaction with various people will help to broaden their perspective. A chance to hone these skills will be an asset when they enter into real professional world. On job knowledge they have acquired will help them to handle future challenges efficiently and effectively.
To sum up, part time job will be beneficial for the overall development of the children. And, that is why I am in strong favor of encouraging children to take an extra responsibility of job along with their studies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
... Soon her inclination turn into passion and and then to a profession. She went to culin...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...sibilities. Jobs will present kids with an crucial challenge to balance their work...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...iciently and effectively. To sum up, part time job will be beneficial for the overall ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, lastly, may, so, then, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26979472141 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99263090492 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7444307665 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1304347826 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8260869565 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21739130435 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235569917982 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687762368033 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622462795581 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149613651627 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538094371647 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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