The diagram shows the making of icecream processing 1

Essay topics:

The diagram shows the making of icecream processing.
1.

The diagram shows many steps for manufacturing icecream. There are six steps in the dairy process that start with the raw material: finished milk is canned icecream.
The first step is mentioning about putting the milk in the clean saucepan. Sugar and other ingredient are added .The final step is about cooling the iceream at a low tempurature for the preservation.
Heat the milk to 70c and keep it at that tempeture for at least 15 to 20 seconds.
The warm milk will be added with some tastey flavour such as chocolate , strawberry and vanilla.
After ,these kinds of icecream will be matched in tube and keep it at 10c .
Then, the icecream is prozen and packeging into box.
Finally, preserves the icream at low tempurature.

Votes
Average: 6.4 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...icecream. The first step is mentioning about putting the milk in the clean sauc...
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Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...an. Sugar and other ingredient are added .The final step is about cooling the icer...
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Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
.... Sugar and other ingredient are added .The final step is about cooling the iceream...
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Line 4, column 71, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...th some tastey flavour such as chocolate , strawberry and vanilla. After ,these ...
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Line 5, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...colate , strawberry and vanilla. After ,these kinds of icecream will be matched ...
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Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ll be matched in tube and keep it at 10c . Then, the icecream is prozen and packe...
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Line 6, column 43, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en, the icecream is prozen and packeging into box. Finally, preserves the icrea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, second, so, then, at least, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 33.7804878049 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 610.0 965.302439024 63% => OK
No of words: 126.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84126984127 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.35036895883 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60539554339 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 106.607317073 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 180.9 283.868780488 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.248711306 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.7777777778 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 3.83414634146 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129185212625 0.215688989381 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655724975333 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105811809722 0.0843802449381 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594807827514 0.15604864568 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837807238748 0.0819641961636 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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