In today's world, it is obvious that technology makes a huge impact on humanity. Nowadays, some people hold the opinion that technologhy has made children creative than children who live in past. As far as, I am concerned, I agree that due to technology,children become more creative than they were in the past. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
One of the primary reason is that computers. According to the scientific researchs , it has been proved that computers makes children more creative. It is accepted by all authorities is that in the beginning of the 2000s, computers involve to children's life and make a connection with their life so usage of computers involve them in creative activities like computer games, music listening, talking with reasearchers and scientist, accessing of popular business man and scientist social platforms. These makes them more intelligent, wise and creative. On the other hand, in old times, children had not computers so they could not use its benefits for creativity. That's why, technologic devises like computers make a difference betwen modern and old times children.
Another reason why I agree with the above statement is that avaibility of information in modern age, makes children much more intelligent and creative. Beginning of 2000s is named as information age because avaiblity of information in this age ultimatively increase to the highest point in history of humanity. Thus, children access all informations about every topic very easly. For instance, when my mother talks about her high school assignments, she explains that finding information about any specific topic was very diffuclt and they had to go library if they had in their nearby but when we need any information which will cause creativity will be found in our pocket due to smartphones by using Internet.
In a word, technology effect children life with information age and using computers.Taking account of all points, it can be stated that new generation of children will be more creative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21341463415 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97428799484 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.9554457619 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8666666667 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266533368619 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894947491166 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107910303356 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183654430069 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150418017425 0.0645574589148 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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