Argument Type - The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council. "An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports t

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Argument Type - The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council. "An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports t

The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds represent the most frequently given reason for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid—a nutritional supplem...

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Sentence: Even if eating fish could effectively protect human from having cold, the author's assertion that the daily use of Ichthaid serve as a good way to forestall and reduce absenteeism is still unwarranted, in two respects.
Description: The fragment Ichthaid serve as is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace serve with verb, past tense

Sentence: Perhaps taking Ichthaid will generate to more grave consequence, exaggerating the high absences situations.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to absences and situations

Sentence: Since the author does not provide any evidence to preclude this possibility-the healthy condition reports-we cannot hastily dram a conclusion that Ichthaid will ensure attendance.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to possibility-the and healthy

Sentence: To support this recommendation the author cites the statics concerning residents' visiting doctors in East Meria, where people eat plenty of fish every day, which indicates the potential effect of fish on preventing cold.
Error: statics Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: A threshold problem with the argument involves the vogue causal relationship between substantial consumption of fish and the prevention from colds-rather than some other phenomenon.
Error: colds-rather Suggestion: colds rather

Sentence: The speaker ignores a host of other possible explanations for relatively low attack by colds-such as a trend at East Meria toward regular exercise, or the pleasant climate condition and geographic situation.
Error: colds-such Suggestion: colds much

Sentence: Since the author does not provide any evidence to preclude this possibility-the healthy condition reports-we cannot hastily dram a conclusion that Ichthaid will ensure attendance.
Error: possibility-the Suggestion: possibility
Error: reports-we Suggestion: reports

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Score: 5.5 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 532 350
No. of Characters: 2855 1500
No. of Different Words: 272 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.803 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.367 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.933 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 230 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 173 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 134 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.399 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5