"Our new plan will help us better protect our staff against exposure to toxic chemicals: We are fitting each new safety suit with an alarm that will sound in the main control booth when the suit is punctured. The control booth will notify the managers on

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"Our new plan will help us better protect our staff against exposure to toxic chemicals: We are fitting each new safety suit with an alarm that will sound in the main control booth when the suit is punctured. The control booth will notify the managers on duty, who will then take the necessary steps to ensure employees' safety. In addition to the obvious safety-related benefits, the fast reaction time will ensure minimal work stoppage and thus result in increased worker productivity and company profitability."

The authour expresses his new plan in order to protect the company workers. Though the idea of the suit implementation is a new one the fact that it will increase worker productiivty and company profitability is highly under question. Firstly the fact that the author mentions that the idea is a new plan to better protect the company staff clearly indicates that there has been plans earlier which didn’t work to protect the workers completely. For the same reason making a decision that the new plan would work better in protecting against chemicals right away is not justified.The author also ne...

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Sentence: The authour expresses his new plan in order to protect the company workers.
Error: authour Suggestion: author

Sentence: Though the idea of the suit implementation is a new one the fact that it will increase worker productiivty and company profitability is highly under question.
Error: productiivty Suggestion: productivity

Sentence: There is no mention of numbers that indicate how many managers are asscociated for a group of workers.
Error: asscociated Suggestion: associated

Sentence: As companies can have vast areas for working, how do we detect the position of the worker with the puctured suit.
Error: puctured Suggestion: ?

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