The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
This is the 21st century where mostly each and every individual of the family works. Some work to maintain a decent living some work for self independence. The most important part of work is going to the place for working and that is why commuting time matters. To control the traffic problem some may suggesrt to increase the lanes but that will only result in mor congestion.
Increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city centre has increased the commuting time by twice in as mentioned. There can be numerous reasons for this increased traffic. The number of people working is raising on day to day basis causing traffic to increase. Adding a new lane may reduce the traffic initially but in the end it worsens the traffic.
As mentioned bicycle lane may cause reduction in congestion but that will also not help in the long run. This solution is not practical. Not everyone is comfotabel in going to work on bicycle. There can be so many things that a person may carry to work making it very difficult to ride a bicycle. During rainy days it will be much worse than going in 4 wheelers to prevent getting wet in rain.
Here it is mentioned that many area residents are keen bicyclists. Mny does not mean everyone. Not everyone is keen on riding a bike especially for going to work. The word keen here is not solidifying the commitment as a person may not be necessarily going to work on bicycle even if he or she is keen bicyclist. Another statement mentioned is a bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase. This may be true to some extant but not completely.
The bicycle may occupy less area but there is a risk of accidents. As a bicycle takes less space people tend to take shortcuts or try to wedge from smaller spaces to reach quickly to their destinations which may result in accidents. Adding bicycle lane may not necessrily reduce the traffic. There can be other reasons for the rush hour traffic. The timing of most of the offices is same causing people to go out on the road at the same time resulting in traffic. There can be so many reasons for the congestion which cannot be necessarily solved by adding bicycle lane.
In conclusion the evidence provided is not sufficient to support the argument. The points mentioned are not valid for each and every individual. The word keen is the main key point which further weakens the argument. There can be so many reasons for the congestion which cannot be necessarily solved by adding bicycle lane.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Adding bicycle lane may not necessrily reduce the traffic.
Error: necessrily Suggestion: necessarily
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 2
argument 4 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2093 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.58 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.44 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.759 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.409 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.448 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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This is the 21st century where mostly ea...
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...at will only result in mor congestion. Increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Hig...
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Line 2, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...mor congestion. Increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway betwee...
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Line 2, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...increased the commuting time by twice in as mentioned. There can be numerous reas...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ut in the end it worsens the traffic. As mentioned bicycle lane may cause red...
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Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... As mentioned bicycle lane may cause reduction in congestion but that will al...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...to work making it very difficult to ride a bicycle. During rainy days it will be ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eelers to prevent getting wet in rain. Here it is mentioned that many area resi...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ue to some extant but not completely. The bicycle may occupy less area but the...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ssarily solved by adding bicycle lane. In conclusion the evidence provided is n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67177242888 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52885894826 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450765864333 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8755942665 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6206896552 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7586206897 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.27586206897 5.70786347227 22% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108409033769 0.218282227539 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338559118955 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779864872564 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0687022473852 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884845594461 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 14.3799401198 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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