Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
People have different ways to enjoy their life without wasting any moment, since we will live once. One of the entertainments way is watching sport event rather alive or using television. Some people prefer to attend any match or game alive; they believe that is more fun. While, I think watching any sport event in my house is much more joy and i prefer it.
First of all, spending my time by watching football match in my house it the best thing I did. My family gathered all in the same room to watch competition between different teams. The most interesting thing was when my brother courage team different than me and my team wined, here was the problem. We started our game with pillows, and my father shared us. I think that moments was the best ever, it strengthen the relationships between us. We became closer and we have deal with other not just brothers but like friends.
Second, I guess watching any game in the home will save the price of the tickets. Any ticket for game is very expensive and it needs much money to buy it just to have fun for couple of hours. While watching tournament in the home can help me to keep my money for more important things. Since I am independent student, I have worked in a library after my school to gather some money for my needs such like, books and etc. I don’t like to take my pocket money from my parents, so why I spend the money to attend any sport event, while I can watch it by TV and benefit from these money.
Finally, I feel more comfort in my home when I watch for example basketball game rather than presenting it alive. In the stadium there were more people watched the game and noise. In addition, there were no more enough seats for all audience, it was very crowded. In my home, I can stretch on the sofa and take a light meal in very claim weathers.
To sum up, it good idea to attend any special event alive, while in my opinion the best thing to do is watching it in the home, so you can enjoy it more than anytime and place.
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Sentence: One of the entertainments way is watching sport event rather alive or using television.
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Suggestion: Refer to entertainments and way
Sentence: First of all, spending my time by watching football match in my house it the best thing I did.
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Suggestion: Refer to it and the
Sentence: The most interesting thing was when my brother courage team different than me and my team wined, here was the problem.
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Sentence: I think that moments was the best ever, it strengthen the relationships between us.
Description: The fragment best ever , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace ever with adjective
Description: The fragment it strengthen the is rare
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Sentence: Since I am independent student,
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Suggestion: Since I am an independent student
Sentence: To sum up, it good idea to attend any special event alive, while in my opinion the best thing to do is watching it in the home, so you can enjoy it more than anytime and place.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to it and good
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Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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