Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Throughout history, leaders of our country has had a keen interest in the development of the country.
In spite of this, there is a recent debate among people on the allocation of federal budget on the specific area it should be covered on. Some group of people suggests the upgrading of art museum, however, other groups may take the opposite view. From my standpoint, I firmly believe that government should support the state-sponsored Olympics games more than arts for the following reasons which are elaborated here below.
To begin with, Government sponsored games creates enthusiasm for the youth to develop great interest in sports. When Government sponsor the young to engage in various games, it develops their mindset of becoming someday a professional in that area. For instance, when my uncle was in high school, he consistently joined the soccer team in school, playing with his team and also engaging in competition with other schools and across the country. He ended up been the best professional player in the country and these availed him the opportunity to advertise for many companies such as Globacom, Coca Cola, to mention but a few. This is because of the unrelenting efforts of the government in supporting the youths by providing them with recognized and well trained coaches, medical assistance and most importantly sponsoring some of the best players in their advancement to college degree.
In addition, it creates an avenue for countries to form alliances. This is a very good approach for countries to support and share some benefits among themselves. My country is a compelling example. In 1996, Nigeria played the world Olympic Games in Switzerland and triumphantly won the game with ten golds, 15 silvers and ten bronze. It was an unspeakable success that promoted the country’s name and fame. The government of Switzerland began to form an alliance with the government of Nigeria, in exchange for good and services and primarily in granting scholarships to students who which to travel out to future their education.
In conclusion, genuine interest among the youths toward sports and the countries forming alliances are some of the reasons why I believe that government should support state-sponsored Olympics teams.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22527472527 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90286742632 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8329706349 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.875 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221069509877 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678235153908 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866743326266 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129612189927 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909664135815 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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