Nowadays is very normal that parents need to work all day and do not have too much time to spend with their kids. In my view, the best way for they use the fewer time for children is having fun with some games or sports. There are my reasons to support my opinion.
First, every child spends almost the day in the school and it is better for parents doing something fun because the school provided the knowledge to the child. All kid likes playing games and it is a good action and involve all family, parents, brothers, and anyone that want to enjoy a good time. My brother works in a multinational called Hamburg sud and he needs to travel all days in the week. When he gets back to his home he plays a lot of games with his children, one game that they like to play is "image e ação" which is a popular game in Brazil and they spend a lot of time talking on each other and they were all happy. Sometimes he needs to do a review on the books and letters from school just to know if it is something wrong but in fact, the school did everything that he needed to learn.
Second, some kids like to coalesce sports and games and I think is very important to their relationships and graduation. My point of view is schools already have done the work with books, homework or any research and parents don’t need to do again. Parents can have some fun doing some sports which is very educational and healthy. I am a judo fan, and I practiced all my life because they teach about respect, discipline and is very healthy as well, because of this I started to practice with my son and we spent a lot of time together doing something that makes him better, in addition, he became a good student because of the things that he learned in our practice. He did not disrespect his teacher, he always is on time in the school schedule. Moreover, his scores on tests getting better as the time pass by. Another thing is that he used to have a bad habit in his alimentation and he did not be heath. On the other hand, nowadays he has good health and the problems with his weight have gone.
In conclusion, the best way for the parents do something in their free time with the children is having some fun with games, even though the game is not educational and practicing some sports. There is a good way to interact together and have a good life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re my reasons to support my opinion. First, every child spends almost the day...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... everything that he needed to learn. Second, some kids like to coalesce sport...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
.... He did not disrespect his teacher, he always is on time in the school schedule. Moreove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, another thing, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.32505643341 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32709809765 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467268623025 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9470037481 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.444444444 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338124769921 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117589222982 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101898965143 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263845053478 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767750845477 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.13 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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