Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The statement states that Piroulettes Ballet School is clear choice for any child because of its intense curriculum, qualified teachers and current alumni's achievements.
I do not agree with the statement that Piroulettes Ballet School is the clear choice due to lack of data given. It says that it has intensive program but they enrol children and not all children can handle pressure. Children need time and freedom to excel in a field. constant pressure can ruin their childhood and make them loathe their parents.
If the teachers have been former ballet dancers in a prestigious ballet companies then the question is why did they leave. If they left after retirement then do they have what it takes to teach children. There is a difference between being a dancer and being a teacher. It states that many students have become professional dancers in a top dancing companies the major concern is what percent it is from those who were enrolled in the beginning.
Without considering all those above data and the data from the other school we cannot consider Piroulettes Ballet School as the clear choice.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Constant
...d time and freedom to excel in a field. constant pressure can ruin their childhood and m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 58.6224719101 29% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 2235.4752809 42% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 186.0 442.535393258 42% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01612903226 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 4.55969084622 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59066714367 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 215.323595506 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602150537634 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 704.065955056 39% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3590138631 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.3 5.21951772744 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306768545141 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101576414213 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783753718169 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172835262904 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415986032935 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 100.480337079 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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