In my view, people should take away a secure job. As psychologists say, the job is one of the most important parts of everybody life. it occupies averagely one-third of the time in a day and also it can occupy people mind all the day. the job can have great influences on people morale, behaviors, culture and happiness. There are many studies which prove that people who have a job do less crimes. So, getting a job is an important issue for all societies and people should not lose any secure chance of the job for the following reasons.
First, if one person misses a chance for a job, there is no guarantee that he can get the better job after that. Although, in many cases they would not have the same suggestion too. For example two years ago, one of my friends did not accept job opportunity in a small design company because she thinks that it was not her competency. Now, after two years she does not have any job and also she can not go to that company too.
Second, if we accept a lower level work we can proceed in it in the future. If we try more we can have better position in the company. For example, my sister get accepted in a small company with low income four years ago. She was so sad but she decided to get that job. With handling many projects, she gets experience and now she is the head of accountants of the company.
Third, if we don't accept one job, we just waste time and money waiting for a better one. Working in a company can increase our well-being and money saving in the life. We can be independent, go shopping, travel and etc. These activities can enhance our life and make us feel better about our job. For example, when my brother started to work, he was so happy about being independent. He could travel with his friends, buy a new car and have more happiness feeling. Consequently, he could get married to his favorite girl one year ago.
To sum up, accepting a lower job is much more better than waiting for another one. It can enhance our experience and professionality, increase our self-confidence, decrease our anxious waiting for a better job, increase our money saving and make us enjoy life more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...most important parts of everybody life. it occupies averagely one-third of the tim...
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Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... it can occupy people mind all the day. the job can have great influences on people...
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Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun crimes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ich prove that people who have a job do less crimes. So, getting a job is an importa...
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Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t he can get the better job after that. Although, in many cases they would not have the ...
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Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ork we can proceed in it in the future. If we try more we can have better position...
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Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...countants of the company. Third, if we dont accept one job, we just waste time and ...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...can be independent, go shopping, travel and etc. These activities can enhance our life a...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...o sum up, accepting a lower job is much more better than waiting for another one. It can en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, third, well, for example, in many cases, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43434343434 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47600977908 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489898989899 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2893086107 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1666666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26356502608 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861610446301 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639632756743 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156797548306 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616373541179 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.