TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading passage and the lecture both are about the storing patients’ medical records. The reading passage believes that the electronic version of storing patients’ medical records has some advantageous over the paper-based storing records. However, the lecturer casts doubt on the reasons mentioned in the passage by providing three outstanding reasons.

Firstly, the author states that the use of electronic records has less cost than the use of paper-based records. Indeed, electronic records need less space and they are accessible from anywhere. The lecturer refutes this point. She argues that doctors keep paper records as emergency backup besides the electronic versions; because they may lose one day.

Secondly, the reading passage says that the electronic records diminish the human errors which may occur due to illegible handwriting or so on for patients’ health. In contrast, the lecturer challenges this reason. She believes that even by storing records in electronic version, doctors need to write notes to examine their patients and they still use paper; then, someone else transformed these notes to the electronic version. Hence, there is still the possibility of human errors such as poor handwriting or the low-quality of the paper.

Finally, the reading material claims that researchers can utilize the electronic records for data mining and use the patients’ information, easily. On the other hand, the lecturer rejects this point of view. She says that these data are difficult to access for researchers; because they have privacy laws. It means that researchers have to follow privacy laws and obtain permission from the government and also the patients in order to access their data. Therefore, this would not guarantee the usefulness of storing electronic records.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, in contrast, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56115107914 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80762711964 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521582733813 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4428412137 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.625 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480206516982 0.272083759551 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154129605972 0.0996497079465 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11472221432 0.0662205650399 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299630795233 0.162205337803 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413178341143 0.0443174109184 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.67 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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