Nowadays, the development of technology has provided a vast range of jobs with a great versatility. With the advent of new jobs, finding a perfect job is no longer the issue amongst people. The challenge is how to be effective and successful in a certain job. In this regard, many people assume that if one has the ability to relate well with people will be successful in a future job. There is another opinion that in order to be successful in a future job, one should study hard in university. I am personally in favor of the second approach. I cling to my viewpoint for two reasons and will illustrate them in the following.
The first aspect to point out is, the ability to relate well with people is not the only attribute of a successful employee or a manager. There are other features that make a person eligible for a certain job. In another word, for being successful in a career one should have different kind of abilities like being punctual, responsible, organized and have the ability to work in a group. These kinds of personalities are achievable by going to university, and the more you participate in university, the better you get in managing your time and being responsible. To clarify my point, let us take a manager as an example, many managers have a high level of education, it clearly indicates the point that having a strong educational background leads to more success in the future job.
Apart from the point made above, when a person studies hard in university due to his efforts in getting better results, one can conclude, this person is a reliable individual. To be more clear, when a person dedicates his life to get promising results during his younger ages guarantees that he will do the same in his future job position. As a result, he becomes successful in his future job. let me take myself as an example, when I was in university I dedicated my life to my lessons at first I was not so successful, so I made more efforts and I got promising results and now in my job I try to do the same, I try hard and whenever I face a problem I recall my university experiences and try to learn from them and use them to solve my problem.
All in all, based on foregoing points and examples, I strongly declare that having a great educational background means a success in the future job. Although some people believe having the ability to relate well with people is the key factor, I refute this remark by emphasizing that this is an important factor but it is not enough. Moreover, this attribute is achievable in the university like many other positive features.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Let
...e becomes successful in his future job. let me take myself as an example, when I wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, apart from, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58279569892 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74361407611 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468817204301 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7483151723 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.157894737 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4736842105 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257714875456 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084513704364 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563401463361 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163105976728 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467870224415 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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