In recent years, a number of measures have been proposed to improve public health. While some believe that the best way of doing so is to create more sports facilities, others claim that this would not achieve the desired result and other actions are needed. In this essay, I would discuss both views and explain why I agree with the latter.
To begin with, better sports infrastructure may lead to a healthier nation. The reason for this is that people who in the past were not able to attend these facilities now will be able to do so. For instance, a woman who wants to learn figure skating needs to skate somewhere, preferably not too far from her home. If there is no ice rink nearby, she might turn her attention to unhealthy activities, such as drinking or watching a lot of TV.
However, while appropriate facilities are important, I would argue that the desired effect may not be achieved. This is because some people do not exercise because they are lazy, and even if the infrastructure is in place, they will not change their way of lives. To conquer this problem, governments may launch a TV campaign which describes the advantages of a healthy lifestyle. Another possible solution may be providing monetary benefits to those who behave in a desired way, such as lowering their taxes.
In conclusion, although sports facilities may lead to improvements in public health, other measures, such as launching a TV campaign or compensating the desired behavior, might be required.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to figure'
Suggestion: to figure
...or instance, a woman who wants to learn figure skating needs to skate somewhere, prefe...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun TV seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of TVs'.
Suggestion: a lot of TVs
...ctivities, such as drinking or watching a lot of TV. However, while appropriate faciliti...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a desired way" with adverb for "desired"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...g monetary benefits to those who behave in a desired way, such as lowering their taxes. In co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1244.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87843137255 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69862624713 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603921568627 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8922926342 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262793723223 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892038398419 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083574377146 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168866048963 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125421372555 0.056905535591 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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