By and large, beyond doubt, it is established that people from all over the world determine tremendous interest to follow the Olympic games which are held every four years. The significance of these games and the huge money that is getting dedicated for improvement of this universal event is something that can not be denied. Therefore, every four-year people get united and even those don't know anything about sports watch at least some of these games. So, that's why I strongly hold the notion that spending budgets of government on such things are going to be more beneficial for the country and the society rather than art. In what follows I will delve into some conspicuous reasons to substantiate my point of view.
The first exquisite point is that although artists are the voice of the society and the always been the typical sample of their contemporary art and the convictions and beliefs and the interests of the people and their job is the thing that is going to pass to the future. But the fame of an artist and an individual's portfolios is something that is renowned to him/her own self. By that I mean, there are myriads of artists now all around the world but we don't know where most of them are from! So it can be concluded that it's kind of futile and fruitless for the society and the sake of the country. On the other hand the athletes of the olympic are the samples of a particular country in the games. In addition, even when they become champions it is declared as the name of the country most of the time for the foreigners and the competitors.
The other subtle point to be mentioned is that being a champion in such high competitive battles is a huge credit for the country and it is most of the time followed by lots of other political benefits such as the establishment of new correlations with other countries. For example what happened to Nigeria in 1997 Olympic game in which Nigeria strikingly and astoundingly won 10 gold, 15 silver, and 10 bronze. After this spectacular victory, Switzerland proposed the formation of some relationships with Nigeria such as scholarships for the students and other contracts related to the material commercial.
Another thing that worth some words here is that the Olympic games are interesting for all the generations even the ones hate the exercising. They sometimes play as a motivation and incentive for talented people, no one borns famous and successful. When they see that their country is giving special care to the athletes and they support them in a way that they have both their personal life and professional life simultaneously developing they push themselves to achieve their dreams. For example, the goalkeeper that was in my country's soccer team this year in World cup games was a completely ordinary person who struggled with lots of difficulties on his way to the national soccer team. But this year the only word I can use to characterize his plays is " supercalifragilisticexpialidocious". He cheered up the whole population and is a remarkable role model for the future generations.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I object to the statement that the budget of the government should be spent on art rather than stimulating the young and talented athletes. To put in briefly, contemplating from all factors and reasons it is much more beneficial in too many aspects to dedicate and invest money in the sport.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, if, so, therefore, another thing, at least, for example, i mean, in addition, in brief, kind of, such as, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2826.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 585.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83076923077 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11309038195 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502564102564 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 880.2 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.686458513 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.571428571 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52380952381 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135211312979 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359447390561 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356296620235 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763048448449 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373427015584 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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