The following passages states that to obtain correct information future research should be carried out through interview-centered method. The reasons provided for this passage might be logical and probable, however there are numerous holes and unwarranted reasons that weakens the conclusion.
First of all, the author compared the research result of two different anthropologists from completely different era. Dr. Field went for the research almost two decades before Dr. Karp went. It is probable that a lot of things changed during these 20 years. The people of Tertia were benighted, but not anymore. During these 20 years, a lot of other visitors have went to Tertia for the same reason as these two doctors. And while their visit, many might have taught them the basic characteristics of any normal parent or human being. Hence, every parent now in Tertia know how to take care of their own children. Therefore, the behaviors of Tertian are different from what Dr. field has seen.
Moreover, the author mentioned that Dr. Karp visited a group of islands including Tertia, where Dr. Field only visited Tertia. This proves the gap in the argument because Dr. Field specifically studied the Tertian culture, but Dr. Karp has an overall idea about the people of different islands near Tertia. Moreover, we do not know the number of people each doctor surveyed. A statistical overview of the people interviewed and observed would have been better.
We can also notice that Dr.Karp used interview-centered method unlike Dr. Field who used observation-centered method. there is a huge difference between these two methods. The method Dr. Karp used is where people has to approach him for interviews, where he asks them series of questions and they give him a specific answer. However, Dr. Fields method is more stronger as he observes each and every person and their lifestyle without causing any sort of disruption. As the methods were different, we cannot justify that Dr.Karp's method is better than Dr. Fields's.
The conclusion could have been stronger if the author provided more warranted reasons. Moreover, lack of statistical data and valid reasons have weakened the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1791 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.045 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.724 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.743 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
The following passages states that to obtain correct information futu...
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Line 2, column 364, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[6]
Message: Note: went is a past participle of "wend". Did you mean 'gone' (past participle of "go")?
Suggestion: gone
... 20 years, a lot of other visitors have went to Tertia for the same reason as these ...
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Line 2, column 444, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
...ese two doctors. And while their visit, many might have taught them the basic characterist...
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Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...een better. We can also notice that Dr.Karp used interview centered method unlike D...
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Line 4, column 118, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...d who used observation centered method. there is a huge difference between these two ...
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Line 4, column 355, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...c answer. However, Dr. Fields method is more stronger as he observes each and every person an...
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Line 4, column 523, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...re different, we cannot justify that Dr.Karp apos;s method is better than Dr. Fields...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15083798883 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53610365096 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558659217877 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7446140951 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8095238095 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0476190476 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260807705843 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712793452683 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711298074106 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118207704915 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993151269939 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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