Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?
For the centuries people’s interaction habits have gradually changed. In modern world, as the technology penetrates almost all areas of our lives, its strong effect becomes inevitable. Therefore, in this essay I am going to elaborate both negative and positive effects made by technological development.
To begin with, I want to emphasize the importance of the new technologies in our daily life. First of all, in comparison with previous periods today we have greater opportunities to interact with our friends, relatives, etc. For instance, taking a computer as an example reveals that, nowadays we can easily chat, send messages, see each other or even get acquaintance with new people from all regions of the world over the computer, to be more specific by using the Internet.
Nevertheless, it is an undeniable fact that sometimes being more addicted to computers results negatively, for instance it weakens relationships. Furthermore, the trends also suggest that nowadays people are more likely to keep in touch with each other only over the computers or telephones, to be more precise, today only a small amount of people prefer to meet and spend their time together, and it really decreases the strength of the relationships.
Moreover, from the enlightened point of view, human beings always need to be together in social atmosphere and to my mind although there is a variety of pros of technology it cannot be considered as the best way for interaction.
To sum it up, taking into account all the mentioned information above, I think we must avoid using the technology in our daily life too much. What I mean is that, we must control the role of the technologies logically in our lives in order to save our relationships from negative effects.
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'Moreover, from the enlightened point of view, human beings always need to be together in social atmosphere and to my mind although there is a variety of pros of technology it cannot be considered as the best way for interaction.'
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Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.
Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
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