Nowadays, people not only chase a job for enough food and clothes but also for individual fulfillment, how to achieve success in a job became a serious concern for young adults. Some people hold the point that compared with hard working in schools, improving the ability to relate well to people is more vital for a successful career, whereas I disagree with it.
Granted the social ability is beneficial to one’ s career development. Especially for jobs which communication is highly required like marketing, teaching. If one does not know how to talk with customers or students properly and effectively, he or she will not do the job well. In addition, the employees who can relate well with others such as performing actively in front of the boss and having a harmonious relationship with colleagues will increase his or her chance to get promoted.
However, solid professional knowledge is more momentous for a successful career. It is because knowledge is the basis of good performance in jobs rather than social skills. For example, a lawyer won a case results from his or her deep and comprehensive legal knowledge, rigorous logical thinking and remarkable debate skill, which from his or her numerous reading and practice in school, but not the good relationships with the judges or other attorneys.
Moreover, what students learned through their hard work in schools can inspire them to cope with difficulties in work. One may have lots of problems when chasing a job development, some good qualities which come from former studying experience could help a lot. For instance, my sister Anna is a magazine editor, in the beginning she got promotion, she was afraid she could not do the job well cause she was overwhelmed by the massive quantity of the job. Then she remembered how did she deal with endless assignments and well organize her time when she was in college, she used the same diligence, tenacity and time management method overcame her challenges in work. She is unlikely to do the job well without the hard working experience in school.
All in all, it is undeniable that a excellent social ability helps one’s career especially when the job demands lots of communication with people, but extensive knowledge and great skills gained and cultivated in school are basic of a career, plus good qualities and experience learned from hard working play a prominent role in one’s better career.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in schools 76
- Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child(5-10 years old)? 1. being helpful2. being honest3. being well organize 70
- TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 73
- Working at home using computer and telephone is better than working in an office. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 35, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04714640199 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82358801864 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558312655087 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.6691491942 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.6 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8666666667 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303620370279 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110721592242 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078469048478 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17374024406 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920809927283 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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