The author states that installing the glass window in the building has severe impact on birds life. Birds cannot able to find out the differences between glass and open air, because of that reason large no of bird population are harmed every single year. Moreover, the author posits the three reason to solve this problem. However, the professor clearly denied the solution presented by author giving the three reason which is totally opposite with the author's view point.
First, The author mention that replacing the regular glass and installing the one-way glass helps to minimize the harming of the bird by colliding in the window. But, the professor rebuts this idea by saying that the one way glass also reflects the same as the regular mirror and the bird on the outside does not able to figure out. Because of the reflection bird figure out that there is may be tree or sky and try to flew over their.
Secondly, The author explain that people should start to paint colorful stripes on their regular window glass. If they use stripes in the window and the bird easily see the stripes and try to avoid to fly their. On the other hand, the professor refutes the opinion of the passage because if people open the window , bird think that there is hole and try to fly their. In addition, he says that if color would not paint in the window then people will not be able to see inside because of darkness.
Third, The passage argue that artificial magnet should install near the building that helps to bird find out their direction. HE further mention that , according to the research, bird can easily find out the direction like people use campus to figure out the direction. On the contrary, the professor totally disagree with the statement by saying that installing the magnet would not work to decrease the build harming. He further mention that bird only use the direction for the long distance travel to find out the way to fly. Bird does not use the direction sense for the short distance. They only use their eyes and brightness for the short distance. Because of that reason installing the magnetic equipment near the building would not be fruitful.
In this way, the professor totally refutes the all not applicable reason mention by author in the passage.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... open air, because of that reason large no of bird population are harmed every sin...
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Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the solution presented by author giving the three reason which is totally opposi...
^^
Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid flying'.
Suggestion: avoid flying
... bird easily see the stripes and try to avoid to fly their. On the other hand, the professor...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...assage because if people open the window , bird think that there is hole and try t...
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Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'HE' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...rd find out their direction. HE further mention that , according to the research, bird ...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...their direction. HE further mention that , according to the research, bird can eas...
^^
Line 7, column 432, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
... decrease the build harming. He further mention that bird only use the direction for th...
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Line 7, column 656, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... and brightness for the short distance. Because of that reason installing the magnetic ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, in addition, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 30.3222958057 188% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 5.01324503311 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 395.0 270.72406181 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77215189873 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22540053478 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427848101266 0.540411800872 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8794490791 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2105263158 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 7.06452816374 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.42419426049 83% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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