Writing a letter to building manager regarding a problem parking your bicycle.•When you started to use bicycle to go to work•What the problem is•Suggesting the solution of the problem.

Essay topics:

Writing a letter to building manager regarding a problem parking your bicycle.
• When you started to use bicycle to go to work
• What the problem is
• Suggesting the solution of the problem.

Submitted by arumoh on Sun, 10/14/2018 - 00:27

Dear Sir,

I’m writing this letter regarding the bicycle parking space nuisance around our building area. I have started using a bicycle in the last two years as my doctor suggested to lose weight. The parking space issue has been a problematic ever since I started using bicycle as many residents are adhere to cars or bikes and there is no enough space allocated for bicycle. Also, my office is just 3 miles away from the building and I feel so comfortable in using bicycle.

Someday, I had to come late from office and it’s difficult to find parking space around our building. Sometimes, I had to park my bicycle outside our building and it’s not safe to do as there is a chance of theft.

To solve this problem, I have a suggestion of using the empty space beneath the stair case or allocate a space of around hundred square feet especially for bicycle parking. This could solve the parking space issue and makes me feel comfortable in parking my bicycle inside the building.

I’m looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Arumoh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested losing'.
Suggestion: suggested losing
...ycle in the last two years as my doctor suggested to lose weight. The parking space issue has bee...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'adhered'.
Suggestion: adhered
...ted using bicycle as many residents are adhere to cars or bikes and there is no enough...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, regarding, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87027027027 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47314871625 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562162162162 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3898667105 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 4.34317383033 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249204469704 0.216113520407 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949552715777 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444234568757 0.0603063233224 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124503404004 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750896470345 0.0580467560999 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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