The following show consumption of energy in 2009 and 2010 Write a summary of the information Select and report the main features and make comparison where relevant Write at least 150 words

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The following show consumption of energy in 2009 and 2010. Write a summary of the information. Select and report the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart and the table illustrate the comparison of energy consumption in 2009 and 2010. The data is distributed among 6 sectors, namely; Oil, Coal, Hydro electricity, Natural gas, Nuclear energy, and renewable.

When it comes to the pie chart, in 2010, the majority of energy is consumed from oil-34%, coal-30% and natural gas-24% respectively. The least priorities were hydroelectricity (6%), nuclear energy (5%), and only 1% relies on renewable as energy consumption.

Having a glance at the table present figures of energy consumed in 2009 as a percentage change, Compared to 2010, the m...

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Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 165 200
No. of Characters: 791 1000
No. of Different Words: 93 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.584 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.794 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.814 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 40 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.907 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.111 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.443 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.671 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

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