Earning money for survival is one of the most important reasons why people work, but it is certainly not the sole one. Ideas like that are only claimed by narrow-minded people who do not have any expectation from life other earning enough to survive. I believe that people need to work to realize their dreams, hobbies or also to socialize. In this essay, I am going to present some of such reasons for people working.
To begin with, a lot of people should spend their money not only on meeting their primary needs but also on enjoyable activities or rather on their hobbies. Life does not only consist of eating, sleeping and working, but also of enjoying it to the fullest. People who earn more money than they need should not just save it, but also spend it on their hobbies. This way, life becomes more tasteful. For example, last year, I decided to spend a little amount of the money I saved while working and went scuba diving, which I had in mind for a long time. Doing so, I realized that how important working was since you can earn money to pursue your hobbies.
Moreover, hobbies are sometimes not enough to make you happy. Sometimes you need somebody to talk to, somebody to drink a cup of coffee with and talk about the latest gossips. So, the workplace provides you with an opportunity to meet new people and make new friends. Besides earning money, you also socialize. Take me as an example. I was dismissed from my job and had been unemployed for a year staying at home and having less contact with people. I can easily say that I did not only want a job to earn money, but to also in contact with people, in other words, to socialize.
Last but not least, although the reasons I mentioned above are important, there are people who consider something more important than those, which is “prestige”. Such people decide to work for the prestige the job offers them. My experience is a compelling example of this. I had always wanted to be an outstanding person in society and decided to work as a soldier, which is a highly prestigious occupation. This way, I would believe in myself and feel more confident.
All in all, some people may consider working as something obligatory to earn money for a living. I, however, hold the opposite idea and think that working provides people with different advantages like realizing their hobbies, socializing with other people or gaining prestige.
- TOEFL TPO 21 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 70
- Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. 84
- Some students prefer classes with open discussions between the professor and students and almost no lectures. Other student prefer classes with lectures and almost no discussions. Which do you prefer . Use reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69248826291 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55836777112 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50234741784 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0800947599 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2916666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20833333333 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273239974095 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801447576435 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649193318601 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174777544299 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751399179625 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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