You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is the one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

The community that we live there, have an essential part in our life. Every positive attempt effect on that's advance and progress. If I have an opportunity to develop my community I prefer to work in children's education for two important reasons.
First, education of children guarantees the future of our community. For example, when I went to school in elementary school there weren't any Institue of development of children's talent and we couldn't estimate out intelligence, because of that, I think to establish such same institute certainly help to the development of children and final our community.

Second, talented children make our community more efficient, For example, in a developed community, individuals from childhood learn how to face the problem and how to solve complex problems themselves.
In sum, I think to invest in children has a very important and prominent effect on the community.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 15.1003584229 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 769.0 1977.66487455 39% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 146.0 407.700716846 36% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26712328767 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 4.48103885553 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99456096678 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 212.727598566 43% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623287671233 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 618.680645161 40% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9135409089 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0479960527837 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277475499429 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377987282591 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0302503701205 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037795635611 0.0645574589148 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 40.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 12.0 Out of 30
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