Presented passage reveals conventional information on subject of Asthma premises, consequences and bodily functions during an Asthma attack. The lecture extract, in turn, provides evidences from recent researches regarding fundamental causations of the attacks.
According to the passage, while Asthma attack airways get narrowed which lead to wheezing, coughing and shortness of breath, and after such an attack the airways return to normal. The lecturer argument is that some of the airways might not recover after repeated episodes of attack. Damaged airways, thereafter, remain weaker and vulnerable. The speaker mentions that this process resembles scarring and named remodeling.
Furthermore, the orator cites recent studies of children, which demonstrated that remodeling might have been a fundamental cause of the disease, not a consequence as it was considered hitherto. Based on the studies, many of children had already had remodeled airways and, hereby, genetics and environmental events appears to be the main reason of Asthma genesis.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 211, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, regarding, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 22.412803532 22% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 902.0 1373.03311258 66% => OK
No of words: 154.0 270.72406181 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.85714285714 5.08290768461 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 4.04702891845 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90404972528 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.701298701299 0.540411800872 130% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 419.366225166 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5286654208 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.75 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 7.06452816374 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224229259562 0.272083759551 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830336697942 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124405793788 0.0662205650399 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157801905233 0.162205337803 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821643937029 0.0443174109184 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 53.8541721854 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.71 12.2367328918 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.24 8.42419426049 133% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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