The contemporary world has been witnessing a unique demographic in some countries with have more youthful population. Some people uphold the merits of this trend while others believe that this phenomenon might be one of the obstacles to the development of those countries.In my perspective, the larger number of adults is more a blessing than a curse for countries prosperity, this view is based on the belief that young people can always bring the country multiple benefits.
On the one hand, having a population misbalance between the old and young, with more of the latter, could impose mass disadvantages. To be specific, old people, in general, are experienced and have accumulated sufficient knowledge standing the test of time which can be passed along generations. Whereas, with less old people in the population, there might be a drain of knowledge which would especially lead to demerits to those youngsters. For instance，without any older workers with both practical as well theoretical experience, those young workers would hardly get a reliable guider, to say nothing of any proper mentorship, which may cause them to adapt to their jobs and responsibilities much slower and reduce the efficiency of the progress in company as a whole.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that the young people are drivers of progress of the nation. Immersing in such a fast changing era, those young people can take the initiative to advance in diverse fields, since they are more likely to be creative and action-oriented. For instance，these high-tech things can hardly be promoted and updated without the energy and time dedicated by those young workers, who draw on their creative and flexible mind and elevate their professional ability through learning fancy things and digesting old stuff consistently. As a result, current society has witnessed increasing number of amazing inventions and gadgets which people get benefits from. Moreover, a larger number of youngster also enhance the country's multiculturalism, due to the youth are more likely to be flexible and have adapting attitude to new things like exotic cultures, which has deepen the degree of globalization to large extent. In light of this global trend, more and more countries becomes the beneficiaries in international trades and overseas tourism, precisely, they gain a huge amount of profits from international collaboration in various ways.
In conclusion，some countries are experiencing a significant change from the aging time to the era with more young people as compared to the old, which I believe is a situation with more benefits than disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in general, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 418.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32535885167 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16727257693 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.309984685 49.4020404114 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.230769231 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1538461538 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190660624311 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689844734809 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046600447682 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134599641859 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418796699523 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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