TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s industrial world, everyone needs to become more knowledgeable. In fact, every today’s task needs to expert, and if one have more expert, s/he could get upper and better position. As a result, professors have the main role in the society for building up expert people. When it comes to this point, some people wonder for having students educated whether University must pay them more. One outstanding viewpoint insists that if one getting information from diverse sources, they must do it. I corroborate this idea. In what follows, I will delve into two reasons to substantiate my response.
First off, by paying more, professors that are expert come to the university. By doing so, in general levels of university and in particular levels of education will grow up. When they were more knowledge, students could understand more and better. It comes as no surprise that their salary is more. For instance, Sharif University pay almost fifty percent more than Tehran Azad University to their faculty’s member. When my friend who study bachelor in the Azad Tehran University comes to Sharif University for studying M.S in mathematics, she told me that she did not like mathematical analysis, but when she attempt Dr. Shahshahani courses, she being very interested, because he explains this course’s concept very well. Therefore, it is not come to surprise that if under graduate university of her had wanted to pay more, she would have some professors such as this person, too.
Second, if university consider high salary for faculty members as it can, it can want that professors teach better. Every final term students must vote about their professors, so there are wild variety of opinion exist that if university can do them, make the University better place for learning. By doing so, faculty members compare their salary with other jobs, and trying to rectify his or her fault in education. However, if their salary was not very much they do not inspire to come of this huge problems very well. For instance, in my country salary of faculty is not very good and there are very limitation for their lives, so persons that wants this position do not trying very much, because there are many problems that they face, so they usually work in other universities for earning money. It comes as no surprise that they do not such ample time for students learning process. Top of all, some of them have not energy for teaching in the class.
To recapitulate, the two logical reasons mentioned in the paragraphs above prove that not only the experts one become faculty member, but also they do in the best way. Thus, we can predict that this idea will improve the educational system of Universities very well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 528, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...mes to Sharif University for studying M.S in mathematics, she told me that she di...
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Line 2, column 616, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'attempts'.
Suggestion: attempts
...ike mathematical analysis, but when she attempt Dr. Shahshahani courses, she being very...
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Line 2, column 653, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...he attempt Dr. Shahshahani courses, she being very interested, because he explains th...
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Line 3, column 883, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...t such ample time for students learning process. Top of all, some of them have not ener...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in general, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96732026144 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63206616925 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516339869281 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2608261159 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1304347826 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91304347826 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135434767016 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427855306723 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352105528022 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870050247818 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287869388508 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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