During the past decades, the digital revolution has changed several facets of our personal lives. In fact, nowadays, people are living in a fast-paced world. As a result, not only parents but also all adults are suffering from lack of time. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether busy parents must occupy their spare time playing with their children or it is better to devote this time doing school assignments. However, there might be some counterexamples about this claim I would argue that parents should spend most of their free time on leisure activities with their teenagers. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that there is a definite link between the intellectual development of a child and his future life. Recent studies which were conducted by some scientist in Tehran University indicate that games and sports serve other purposes rather than just playing, in fact, they are not only profitable but also essential for the development of children's brain. In other words, adolescents can acquire interpersonal and social skills by playing games or joining sports teams particularly with their parents who are their loved ones. In this regard, parents can prepare a favorable condition for their children to boost their social skills and become mentally strong enough for their adult life.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that, however; no one else can accomplish parental responsibilities, sometimes we can hire a tutor or a nurse to help our children with their lessons. Therefore, parents can save their precious time for other activities rather than studying and doing daily assignments. Surprisingly, many parents neither the educated ones nor those with limited literacy cannot cope with the modern education system. As a result, their efforts to assist their children in studying their lessons will eventually lead to serious conflicts. In this regard, hiring a professional teacher could be more effective for their teenagers.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas which were presented above I strongly believe that busy parents must enjoy having fun with their children during their leisure time instead of studying with them. Consequently, parents can readily hire a tutor for this purpose, and juveniles would improve their social skills in this way.
- TPO21 – Independent: A/D? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 83
- TPO22-teachers should not make their political and social point of views known to students 80
- The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. 90
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun to play games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 80
- TPO43 85
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, so, therefore, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22135416667 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63286144036 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5703125 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4211056574 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.941176471 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260966037464 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846861867226 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777665098555 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175598593805 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481959164306 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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