Students should fund their education with part-time work that they do while they study
The education system in our society is getting all over place and has crept in a student's to an extent that they need to think only about their grades and academics to have a good future. This pressure has been intense and mandatory as well. The education system is stricter these days and modernized as well with the advancement of technology. The digitization has also crept in our lives letting us all depend on it and it demands us to up to mark and updated no matter who we are and what place are we in. The education system is no different and not spared by the technology advancement and hence the increasing cost and the jobs of today's parents are leveling up and pay them more as they work so hard for getting a good and secured future of their children.
The dependency of the students' at home is only monetarily these days until they stand on their own feet. Emotional as well as psychological dependency has just taken a leap of faith and has been only decreasing exponentially with the times. That is why people thin why not make their children completely free and have them stand on their own feet right from they turn 18 (mostly in western countries). This is due to the "less dependency" and "being independent" thought of being the new cool.
The education system is so strict and pressure intense that students really find no time to get involved in even extra co-curricular activities. There is a lot to "study". The digitization in schools right from the start when a child enters the school is very intensive and it enforces students to do the best at academics in this highly modernized world and if not, the thought of lagging behind may "eat them up". So, along with it, the thought of living all by themselves and raising fund for themselves for school and tuition is not a very good idea.
Parents have been supportive in case of monetary issues and even give best tutors and schools to their kids.Because of their hectic and monotonous work schedules, dis balanced work and personal life, they are not able to spend the "quality time" with their kids hence reducing the emotional bond with them. But yes, the money flows in which is helping their kids.
Have we not all heard of the increasing suicidal tendencies among teenagers? There have been so many instances where students have tried to end their lives merely because of the thought of getting flunk in the exam because he was not able to study properly keeping the thought of not getting paid on time at his work to pay his tuition fees. Is this fair to them? If anything else bothers them apart from studies, that leads to harmful health of theirs and they end up in trauma and depression. They are not able to concentrate on their studies leading to poor grades and low academic record.They lose self-confidence and get unmotivated.
So, it's about the time management when actually there is no "time" to do anything else than study. Contrary would have been fruitful if the education system was not that intensive and would have "pampered" their students and was a little more "westernized". By that claim is meant that varsities outside India focus on the knowledge and practical aspects of education and not on grades. Growing up a mugger is not their motto.
Fuel to the education system is money and that should be fueled by parents until their kids have a sustainable life of his own by giving his best at school and being an achiever then. Parents do give their kids their best in providing them the best school in town so why take the childhood/tenacity away just at the mere thought of being independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...getting all over place and has crept in a students to an extent that they need to think on...
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Line 1, column 510, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...er who we are and what place are we in. The education system is no different and no...
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Line 1, column 687, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...rents are leveling up and pay them more as they work so hard for getting a good an...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d secured future of their children. The dependency of the students at home is o...
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Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...e best tutors and schools to their kids.Because of their hectic and monotonous work sch...
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Line 9, column 593, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
... to poor grades and low academic record.They lose self-confidence and get unmotivate...
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Line 11, column 5, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...-confidence and get unmotivated. So, its about the time management when actually...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, may, really, so, then, well, apart from, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3058.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 638.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79310344828 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02579962599 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91463064313 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.9 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.8403458005 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.615384615 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.19230769231 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289483028838 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773291343871 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602272602702 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146312653622 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044462531667 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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