The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market (IELTS BOOK 3 TEST 1)

Submitted by alxxk on Thu, 12/20/2018 - 13:07

The bar chart illustrates the amount of Japanese travellers leaving their country, from the year 1985 to 1995. Moreover, the second infographic is a line graph depicting Australia's share of the Japanese tourist industry.

As indicated in the bar chart, 1985 was the lowest figure for people travelling abroad compared to the next 10 years. The number of tourists was well under 6 million people. Then, in 1990, the number of passengers gradually increased at a rate of approximately 10 million people. However, the following year (1991), there was a slight decline in the amount of people. Later, in 1995 the proportion of global-trotters peaked in between the range of 16 million and 14 million.

Contrary to the previous graph, the line graph arbitrarily demonstrates Australia's share of Japan's tourism industry, reaching its apex in the year 1994. The percentage displays itself at a modest rate of just slightly above 6%, but in the following year, 1995, the rate declines by a small amount, landing at exactly 6%. Moreover, during a four-year time frame (from 1985 to 1989), the pattern of the graph gradually increased. One year after 1989 the rate significantly plummeted, it was the first anomaly in the graph. Later, in 1991, the percentage of shares rose to approximately the same rate as it was before the anomaly. From thereon the rates steadily increased.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o overseas countries from 1985 to 1995. Whereas, The line graph represents the data abo...
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ist market were fluctuated over a given period of time. According to bar chart, In 1985 abo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 998.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39459459459 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84266770457 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605405405405 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9285105865 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.888888889 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285814295872 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117609321661 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739242796067 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169471385424 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560147130862 0.0819641961636 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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