It is argued that longer imprisonment can reduce crimes, yet other people believe that this can be achieved with many other ways. In my view, crime reduction is not linked to the length of prison sentences but better support during sentences, better resettlement, etc. for ex-prisoners.
Firstly, the longer prison terms do not help to prevent offenders from re-offending but only delay it, especially minor crimes as burglary and fraud. Secondly, the longer convicts are kept behind the bars, the more it would cost the state to pay for the food, water, electricity, healthcare services, management, etc. Lastly, lengthening locked-up time would make it much harder for criminals to find jobs and to rejoin the society after the release, particularly the long-term convicts. And they therefore would probably feel left behind among surrounding people and then fall back to the cycle of criminal activities.
On the other hand, there are numerous better alternatives that should be applied to cut down the crime population. For instance, community sentences are reported to be more effective than short-term sentences. By this way, offenders would learn to deal better with drugs and alcohol. Additionally, medical treatment for mental disorders should also be provided for locked-up people as mental problems are usually the root of crimes. Furthermore, building a consistent contact with their families is also a good method to encourage them into better people. And more importantly, social rehabilitation for ex-convicts such as stable jobs and suitable habitations should be taken into a serious consideration as it could be the key factor to keep them away from their old track.
In conclusion, I do not see lengthening custodial terms is the best way to bring down the criminal rate but only better support from the government on matters such as mental treatment, social rehabilitation, community services for ex-offenders.
- Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? 89
- The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree? (IELTS Academic Test, 2017) 78
- Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 73
- Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
- The bar chart shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007 69
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
It is argued that longer imprisonment can possibly reduce crimes, yet other people believe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39016393443 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93841838526 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609836065574 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4434269191 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.461538462 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158515290109 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539869090478 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525438103749 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101991584285 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554775755125 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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