Some people believe that our happiness depends on how much money we have. Others say that ‘money cannot buy happiness’. Do you think that having money is the key to happiness, or are there more important factors? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant information from your own knowledge and experience.
A surging proportion of individuals are keen to think that money may buy happiness by giving people a certain amount of joy if they have much money. Despite many people view that money cannot buy happiness, no matter how much money you have. It is being a matter of considerable and interesting debate. It will not be fare to conclude immediately. I firmly believe that living with amount money or without money will bring happiness in many ways, depend on what happiness is.
As we know, people do hard work daily for finding much money for their life. By having enough amount of money in bank,...
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I firmly believe that living with amount money or without money will bring happiness in many ways, depend on what happiness is.
I firmly believe that living with amount money or without money will bring happiness in many ways, which depend on what happiness is.
Sentence: Thirdly, money not only the one factor of happiness because a happy family started from how they price every moment they have by moneyless.
Description: The word price is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to price
Sentence: A simple rose from husband, even just from his own house, will bring happiness of romantic moment and safe the memories longer than taking much money in bank account of wife.
Description: The tag an adjective is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to safe and the
Sentence: Moreover, happiness can be created by having good family that people can give attention each others.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and others
Sentence: In my conclusion, I do agree that money play an important thing in happiness but not all happiness can be bought just by amount money.
Description: The fragment money play an is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace play with verb, past tense
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