Working in a job is always played significant role in each individual's life. We learn a lots of things while we work. Today, some parents ask the teenagers to work while they study. However, others believe that they should not study and focus only their classes. It is obvious that working in early age works to person's advantage. I am with the former group and the lines will shed light on my viewpoint.
First of all, when students work in a job, they may gain the sense of responsibility; therefore, parents want kids work in a part time job whlie they study. Kids study better, if they face the brutal reality of real life. To working until a certain hour and earning amount of money is tough.
Secondly, in addition the imporantce of having responsibility, there are another subtle point which deserve some words. Many people have struggled with making a decent living. Due to cost of living, most of parents cannot afford of their kid's expenses. I think, teenagers may feel more free if they can ear their own money. According to the a recent research which conducted at Harvard University by the team of reputable scientist, the number of working teenagers has skyrocketed compared the last decades. What is more, these teenagers, who afford their own expenses, do not like to depend their families and buy what they want.
To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one cannot the underestimate the importance of ealy working. On the one hand, Kids learn self-discipline, on the other hand they earn money. I consider that every toddler should work while they are studying.
- TOEFL TPO 11 - Integrated Writing Task 78
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... always played significant role in each individuals life. We learn a lots of things while w...
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Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...role in each individuals life. We learn a lots of things while we work. Today, some pe...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... therefore, parents want kids work in a part time job whlie they study. Kids study better...
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Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... whlie they study. Kids study better, if they face the brutal reality of real lif...
^^
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
...a decent living. Due to cost of living, most of parents cannot afford of their kids expenses. I...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...y can ear their own money. According to the a recent research which conducted at Harv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, i think, in addition, first of all, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 276.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86956521739 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63353711733 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630434782609 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5547534529 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6666666667 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140445072738 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443984768498 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404356478724 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0836272026358 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107825330662 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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