I strongly agree with the essay that as human beings, we are obliged to make great efforts to save endangered animal or plant species at a equally great cost in money and jobs. Viewing through the history of our Planet known to us, human is the only one among all the species in the world who developed so glorious civilazation and technology. Due to the rapid development of our society, we had various infulences to the Earth, some of them endandered the other living species in our planet, thus there is a necessity for people our of society to save them as hard as we can. I will adrees my view in three points to explain why we should protect them.
To begin with, Given to the knowledge that the biodiversity is significant to ecosystem because with various kinds of species, the balance of ecosystem will be stable and easy to maintain. There is a huge dam called three georges dam in upstream of Yangtze River, while after having been providing sufficient water eletricity and controlling the stream for deacdes, the side-effect emerged, where the ecosystem's balance was broken. Because thie huge dam changed the climate among the whole upriver, the land among the river is flushing away by exorbitant rain every year hence thousands of living spicies habitats had been destroyed by the drainage, the Yangtze dolphins which had been already endangered now are the edge of extinction. Some experts predicted that due to the serious situation, there would be more endangered living species' absences. Thus we should take action now to save them.
In addtition,saving the endangere species is also protecting our lives. If we do not protect them in a proper way, we may have serious survival issue. In ancient China, the people have met the trouble casused by taking careless of the living species in danger. There were lots of origin forest where living lots of endangered speicies near the midstream of Huanghe River, while the emperor of Qin dynasty wanted to built a glamorous palace which need huge amout of woods which most of them are precious ,also the habitats were near the mid-stream of Huanghe RIver. So a huge amout of trees were hewed by the workers thus the land which held by the root of trees previously underther flushing of Huanghe River had gone with the water. After that , the people living in the middle of china has suffered the drought until now, as the place where were trees are desert now. Thus the living species in danger should be protected by us.
However, we should not make every effort that we could to solve this troulbe as there are still lots of other significant matters waiting for us. We should take this issur in an considerable way.Thus I do not think we should take extraodinary cost and jobs to handle one of the most significant problems of human beings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, still, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2328.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78028747433 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49321506059 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503080082136 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3431378145 60.3974514979 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0555555556 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130950050985 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408723841613 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683027559001 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.079888316866 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361778572156 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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